Many authors enjoy adding twists to their stories, that is, events that surprise readers, often at the climactic stage. We want readers to gasp and say, “No! That didn’t really happen!” This creates a spike in emotions that helps make your story memorable.
Since we want to surprise readers, we might wonder if we should foreshadow story twists. Will foreshadowing ruin the surprise and minimize the desired gasp?
We should foreshadow twists. My experience tells me that an unforeshadowed twist annoys readers. While they might enjoy being surprised, they don’t want to be betrayed. They don’t want to be shocked by something they couldn’t possibly see coming, that is, a shock that is unreasonable, out of the blue, or a violation of the elements you have set in the story.
For example, if your hero dies, that is often a big twist that readers might or might not accept. If a piano randomly falls from a window and smashes him, and no story-related reason exists for the death, then readers might throw your book across the room. Yet, if he dies because of a carefully prepared series of events that aids the story, then readers can accept it even if they are shocked by it.
Still, you can foreshadow a twist without giving it away. This will protect your desire to deliver a gasp while avoiding reader annoyance.
In my book Reapers (vague spoilers ahead), I foreshadowed the death of a certain character. As you read, you can tell that this character might die, so there is no surprise when he or she actually dies. The twist is how he or she dies. I foreshadowed the death, but readers likely did not expect the method. Yet, if readers mentally recall the events leading up to the death, they will likely nod and think, “Yes, it all makes sense. I should have seen this coming.”
And that is the key. We don’t want readers to see the twist coming, but we do want them to believe they should have seen it. Every twist should adhere to the story’s foundational elements, and the twist must have a purpose. If the twist ignores either of these, readers will feel betrayed.
In the film Tangled, a story twist raised a literal gasp in me. When Flynn Rider (Eugene) cut Rapunzel’s hair, his action shocked me. What a great twist! Why was it great? Because, although I didn’t see it coming, it took only seconds for me to realize how well it worked in the story. The writer foreshadowed every element of the twist without giving the actual twist away.
Although Rapunzel’s hair was a treasure of priceless value, it was also the reason for her captivity. The only way to set her free was to separate it from her. Also, Flynn’s story arc demanded a redemptive act that could not be denied. He knew that rescuing her would result in his death, but love and a redeemed heart combined to launch his compassionate and selfless act.
The story foreshadowed the cutting’s effect on her hair and on the villain. It foreshadowed the crippling of her healing ability. It even foreshadowed the tool Flynn would use to cut her hair, a fragment from the broken mirror (which was also an appropriate symbol).
The setup was perfect. The action was flawlessly executed. The twist was gasp-inducing. Yet, I never saw it coming. And afterward, I muttered the appropriate line: “I should have seen it coming.”
Here is the scene:
Without all the foreshadowing, the twist would have been flat and ineffective. Foreshadowing made it powerful and memorable.
The next sequence in the film, however, bothered me greatly. After such brilliant storytelling, I felt betrayed by how the writer saved Flynn. After seeing the film a few times, I still couldn’t see how it was foreshadowed.
Here is the healing scene:
One day I decided to sit down and watch the film, searching for any foreshadowing of this scene. I couldn’t believe that such a talented writer would omit such an essential element.
It didn’t take long to see it. No need to watch the whole thing. Notice the part from 0:20 seconds to 0:35 seconds.
A drop falls from the sky. When it hits the ground, it creates a healing flower, which foreshadows the teardrop falling and healing Flynn. Go back and look at his healing. After the teardrop falls, at the site of his wound, you will see a burst of light that takes the shape of the healing flower.
The foreshadowing is there, and it is beautifully done. I just missed it. My feelings of betrayal were wiped away. This story is exceptional, because the writer employed foreshadowing with deft expertise through every sequence, even the stunning twist and healing.
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