This is no joke. We need critiques.
Don’t forget the critiquing guidelines. All you have to do is post a comment about the submission below. Don’t feel like you have to critique the whole piece. Even a short comment on one aspect can be helpful.
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This is another short excerpt, so I trust that many of you will have time to check it out.
Beauty is Found Within – by Tabitha
Screeching tire sounds filled the air, as horns blasted through the foggy night. The sound of glass crunched as his windshield started to cave in. He tried to right the car, but it was too late he was going too fast. The car flipped onto its side, pinning itself against another car. The back of his head hit against the headrest as the air bag deployed. The last thing he remembered was the sound of sirens and a bright light, before everything went dark.
Annabel startled awake as hot coffee splashed on her hand. She hadn’t realized she’d drifted off and practically fell asleep at the counter. “Oops! Sorry Hun!” said Ms. James, an elderly woman and owner of the diner. She was trying to balance a coffee pot and a full tray of dishes at the same time. “No worry’s, I needed the wake-up anyways. How long was I asleep?” “For about an hour sweetie.” She sighed. She really needed to get back to the hospital. But first she’d have some coffee and try to wake-up fully.
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